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By: Faisal.K

Faisal.K — Mon, 03 Aug 2009 20:19:59 +0000

@ Nikki be careful what you wish for, and thanks

@ Raheela thank you

By: raheela

raheela — Mon, 03 Aug 2009 19:55:03 +0000

wow not bad not bad at all!!!

By: Nikki

Nikki — Sun, 02 Aug 2009 19:51:40 +0000

Im happy first of all that I have found ur blog after a lonnnnnnnnng time and reading this post specifically after all this time made my hunger to read something good fulfilled Im really happy to see such an amazing effort from u and Hey I better be getting a free copy of this book Just Kidding !

By: Faisal.K

Faisal.K — Sun, 02 Aug 2009 19:35:04 +0000

@ Waisey babu thanks, yes i think i will clear out the errors in the edit man you will find this in the bookstores if someone agrees to print it lol or else i will put up the finished novel here for download & say to hell with our publishers.

@ Saira thanks a lot, yes as mentioned it will go through a final edit if i can find someone who is willing to sit through it lol.. or ill do it myself.

@Bina shah the two cents are worth a lot, and i understand what you are saying, but hopefully i can make it better for the final draft. In any case ive never partied in those huts on the french beach so i dunno

@Tahera, thanks that means a lot coming from an accomplished fiction writer like you

@ tazeen yeh you were the first one to read the first chapter i think, thank you for your support Taz, its always been there. As for Lord nazir i shall say two words “Sher Squadern”

By: Tazeen

Tazeen — Sun, 02 Aug 2009 17:09:39 +0000

by the way, whats with Lord Nazir? I mean seriously!

By: Tazeen

Tazeen — Sun, 02 Aug 2009 17:09:05 +0000

I have seen the whole chapter people … things will keep getting better

By: Tahera

Tahera — Sun, 02 Aug 2009 13:32:11 +0000

Good work, Faisal. It’s a captivating, rich and promising narrative.I like the descriptive narrative…you are actually painting pictures with words. Good luck with you venture!

By: Bina Shah

Bina Shah — Sun, 02 Aug 2009 07:13:08 +0000

The problem I have with this opening is that it is too self-conscious. It reads as if you, the author, thought to yourself, “What must a village boy think when he sees us rich people partying in our beach huts?” and then you wrote down what you thought he would be thinking. In that sense the ‘voice’ is not authentic. Too self-conscious and too stiff. The writing needs more elegance, it needs to take us into his head and make us forget that an author even exists. It should not make us think it’s just a gimmick by the writer. My two cents, for what they’re worth. – BS

By: Saira

Saira — Sun, 02 Aug 2009 03:41:05 +0000

You know… I was expecting a typical desi author over exaggerated thingamajig. But was pleasantly surprised. It kept me reading. I like the descriptions. They’re the kind which make you feel like you’re there. The only thing I sort noticed was that some of the sentences might need to be broken up.

Good luck!